Your tone comes off a bit aggressive for this script, so I want you to soften and brighten up the tone a bit just so that it fits a little better. If we think about who Peter is and what is going on in the scene, we;re tlaking about his likes and everything, so try to connect when you talk about things you like, you tend to have more of a calm, passionate tone.

Try to add more emotional changes to your voice so that they match different emotions that Peter may be feeling. This helps the audience to connect more and understand the stroy better.

I want you to over articulate in this even more just so you can really hit on the clarity of the words overall. The more you practice this and tongue twisters and over articulating in general, eventually it'll naturally become part of you and you won't have to voer think on it, instead it just happens. Keep up the good work!