Nice job with articulating and enunciating! Your words are very clear. There were some moments I could hear you mixing up your T's as D's like in Peter and some words that didn't end and blended into each other, so make sure you hit the last letter of the words too!

For a children's narrator aimed for kids, I would brighten and soften up your tone a little more just to give it more of that soothing, calm quality. Don't be afraid to add in some pre life likes chuckles and sighs. Kids love when things are interactive!

For the emotions, you did well with finding the moments to change up your tone slightly, like at "terribly tough". Try to emphasize the emotions even more just so they're really known, especially for a kids audience. Keep up the great work!