Great job, my dude! Your mic quality is fantastic, but I could hear moments where you shifted away from directly in front of your mic. I loved No cash no problem, I could actually hear that being on a tv commercial.

This was a great read. And with that slight slip up in the middle, you handled it well by allowing yourself a moment to breath and start the sentence over. Really nice. My major critique would be try to relax and take deeper breaths. There were a few moments where I could tell you were starting to lose your breath. But really loved the energy you used for the reading.

I like the tone of your voice! It has a bit of a smooth, confident type of tone that's also pretty friendly.

This sounds more like you're speaking to someone next to you versus the scene of the gymnasium with no microphone. Engage your diaphragm and push your voice out to reach the other end of the gym. Take really big breaths and fill up your lungs with air. Keep working on your breathing exercises so that you can build on your breath control.

There were some moments of hesitation and as if you were unsure of what you were speaking about or what was coming next. The more you practice, audition, and read aloud, the easier it'll be to gain the skill of reading ahead. Also reading the script a few times before recording can help you familiarize yourself with it.

There were some words you missed and mispronounced, so make sure you stay accurate to the script, unless the client says that it's ok to add something. Overall though this was a great start so good job!