Your pacing is a bit slow, so try to speed up a little! It sounds like you're trying to hit on words, which is good when practicing before recording to get a feel for enunciating and speaking clearly, but you want to think of this to be like an audition and make it sound as natural as possible. Going slower too long can cause the audience's attention to go, so you want to find a nice flow.

There's no projection going on here which is the main point for this homework. Remember that you're in a gymnasium with no microphone and you need the whole gym to hear your voice. Take a big deep breath and use your diaphragm to make your voice travel.

I liked the energy and tone you were giving. You sounded confident in what you are speaking about!

There were a few mistakes going on and I could hear some of them were getting to you and making you frustrated. Take a few seconds and reset yourself and don't force yourself to go straight back in. This can cause you to lose your energy and make more mistakes. There was also a word here and there where you said something completely different, so make sure to stay accurate so that it doesn't change the meaning. Keep up the good work!