Hey Jayce! So, there was a particular part that I liked the most: the part where you said, "No cash? No problem. No kidding!" I think that particular energy should be carried throughout the entire monologue since we were told to speak as if we were speaking to a crowd in a gym. And don't be afraid to break up the sentence. Remember to pay attention to the punctuation in certain spots, and it'll have a nice flow. Other than that, I think you did well! :)

Projection and smiling need improvement. Right now, the voice lacks the fullness and presence needed to make the delivery feel engaging and believable. Make sure you’re using your diaphragm to support your voice so it carries with more power without straining. At the same time, incorporating a consistent smile throughout will naturally add warmth and energy to the read, making it feel more inviting and engaging.

There were a few flubs, but you were able to recover to a degree. It’s clear that you’re working to get the words right, which is great! However, try to stay in the moment rather than overthinking the mistakes. If you stumble, take a quick breath, reset, and keep moving forward confidently.

The delivery feels somewhat forced and lacks enthusiasm, which makes it sound bored or disconnected from the material. If you find it hard to connect emotionally, try imagining you’re talking to a real person who is genuinely interested in what you’re saying. That shift in mindset can help make the performance feel more natural and conversational.

Breath control is solid, which is a great strength! You’re able to get through sentences smoothly without running out of air. Now, it’s about refining the other elements—pronunciation, projection, and smiling.