Make sure that you are projecting your voice! Your voice sounds like its at a normal volume so it makes it seem more like you're talking to someone next to you versus being in a gym with no microphone and your voice being heard in the whole room. You wanna engage with your diaphragm and really push your words out. Take a really big breath so you have the breath support there to help.

You have a nice, softer tone which is very friendly and welcoming which I love.

You tend to take a lot of micro breaths between words. Try finding moments to take a really big breath so that you can get through more words within one breath versus having to breath every few words. It'll make the flow way more cohesive.

Your pacing a bit too fast so I want you to slow down a little. You're not giving yourself any of those breath marks or moments to take in a deep breath and rush into the next sentence. You wanna give the audience those tiny breaks to absorb what you're saying. Overall, great work!