Great work. Your pacing was really nice and your tone was crisp. I think there was just a moment where your breath got away from you, but you powered through and sounded great.

Projection is being attempted, which is great! Now, the next step is to maintain that level of projection consistently throughout the read. Right now, your energy dips as you progress through the script, so work on keeping that same level of engagement and presence from start to finish.

Your smile is present, which adds warmth to the delivery, but there’s room for a bit more. A slightly brighter and more sustained smile would help keep the read feeling inviting and lively. Think about something that genuinely excites you and let that feeling carry through the entire performance.

You have a warm and friendly read, which is a strong foundation, but it fades slightly at certain points. Be mindful of keeping consistent enthusiasm so that the delivery remains engaging all the way through.

I appreciate that you’re actively trying to change things up, which adds variety to the performance. Your breath control is solid—you’re staggering breaths well and don’t stop to take big, distracting inhales mid-sentence, which makes the read flow naturally.

One small thing I noticed is that you take a breath before “Magnifying Glass.” Using breath marks in your script could help make those moments feel more natural and intentional rather than feeling like a quick adjustment in the moment.

Honestly, I’m just nitpicking at this point—this was a really solid read! Keep refining your projection, smile, and energy consistency, and this will feel even more polished and dynamic. Great work!