Projection could use some work. Make sure you’re fully engaging your diaphragm to give your voice more power and presence. Remember your setting and environment—your performance should reflect that energy and scale. If the scene takes place in a large space, your voice should carry naturally without sounding forced.

There were a few stumbles in the beginning, which is normal, but work on getting comfortable with the script before recording. Reading it aloud a few times before performing will help smooth out those rough spots and make the delivery feel more natural.

I also noticed some static in the recording, which might be a mic placement or gain issue. Check your audio setup to see if lowering the gain slightly or adjusting the mic position helps reduce any unwanted noise.

Pronunciation and enunciation are inconsistent—some words are clear, but there’s a tendency to slur in the middle of sentences. Slowing down just a bit and focusing on articulation will help ensure each word is distinct and easy to follow.

Breath control is okay, but I’d like to see you keep working on your vocal exercises to build more stamina and control. Exercises like doggy pants and long exhales will help you maintain steady breath support throughout your read.

Lastly, I want you to think about something that really excites you and bring that energy into this script. Right now, it feels like you’re reading the words, but I want you to fully embody the excitement and enthusiasm behind them. If you can connect with that genuine feeling, the performance will feel much more natural and engaging.

Keep pushing yourself—you’re making progress!