Ok, so there are a couple of things we can work on here, with the main focus being projection. Make sure you’re really using your diaphragm to give your voice more depth and presence without straining. Right now, it feels like it’s not fully supported, so working on breath control and diaphragmatic engagement will help bring more power and consistency to your delivery.

You started off with a bit of an aggressive tone, which could be an interesting choice, but I don’t think it was a conscious one. The smile does come through a bit, which makes me think the tone naturally shifted rather than being an intentional acting choice. If aggression was the goal, then lean into it fully, but if not, try to soften the opening with more warmth in your voice. This will naturally make your performance feel more friendly and approachable.

Your breath control is solid, as you’re able to get through longer sentences comfortably with staggered breathing throughout. This is a great skill to have, and you’re using it well! That said, I want you to slow down just a bit more. Remember, when auditioning, you don’t need to rush—you have the time to let each line breathe. Slowing down will also help emphasize key words and make your delivery feel more intentional.

There were a few flubs toward the end, but you recovered nicely, which is great. Many people let mistakes throw them off completely, but you were able to stay on track and finish strong.

Enunciation and pronunciation are solid—despite the faster pacing, you’re still clear and easy to understand. That’s a great strength, but as mentioned earlier, slowing down slightly will help with articulation and allow the performance to feel more natural.

Overall, strong effort! Focus on projection, pacing, and committing fully to your tonal choices, and your read will feel even more refined and polished. Keep at it!