Keep working on projection, but I also want to emphasize that when you’re sick, vocal recovery is the most important thing. I don’t want you pushing your voice too hard while recovering—rest and hydration should be the priority. Take it easy and make sure you’re warming up properly to avoid straining your voice during this time.

Your smile is there, and that’s great—it helps bring warmth and personality into the read. Keep focusing on good breath control, though I completely understand that being sick makes that harder. Once you’re feeling better, work on deep diaphragmatic breathing exercises to maintain consistent airflow and stamina throughout your read.

Your enunciation and pronunciation could use a little more attention, as some words jumble together—for example, "deluxe" sounded like "dislux." Make sure to slow down just a bit and really articulate each syllable so that the words come through clearly and naturally.

The conversational tone is solid, but towards the end, it starts to sound a little flirty—which is an interesting choice! If that’s the direction you’re going for, fully commit to it. However, if that wasn’t intentional, be mindful of how tone shifts towards the end so that it aligns with the overall intent of the read.

I also noticed some stuttering throughout, which could be due to unfamiliarity with the script. A good way to smooth this out is to read through the script multiple times before recording, so you’re more comfortable with the phrasing and don’t have to think as much while performing.

Whatever direction you choose, just commit to it fully. That confidence will make your delivery feel more natural and polished. Overall, well done! Keep up the great work, and I hope you feel better soon!