I like that you added a lot of very different nuances to your narration! Despite that it could've used some more projection, I think the way you narrated it was very engaging. I like your voice! Well done, Sammy (:

Very entertaining!!!

Nice job with the pre-life, but it doesn’t transition into the script as smoothly as it could. The recovery is solid, though, and you manage to stay engaged, which is great. To make the transition feel more natural, try imagining that you’re already mid-conversation with a group of people. This will help the energy flow more seamlessly into the script rather than feeling like a hard shift.

Projection needs some work—right now, it sounds like you’re talking to one person instead of a gym full of people without a microphone. The energy is there, but it’s too contained. Think about how you’d naturally speak in a large space—not by shouting, but by supporting your voice with your diaphragm to make sure your words carry without strain.

There are pauses between some paragraphs, which makes the read feel a little choppy. These pauses seem to be coming from running out of breath, so focusing on staggered breathing techniques can help maintain a fluid and controlled performance. Try practicing longer sentences with intentional breath placement to avoid unnecessary stops.

I can hear hints of a smile trying to poke through, which is great! A more consistent smile throughout the read will help add warmth and engagement. The pauses and breath control issues might also be affecting this, so smoother pacing and stronger breath support will help the smile feel more natural.

Your focus is strong while reading, which is a great sign! You’re present and engaged, and that’s a skill not everyone naturally has. Now, the conversational pacing needs some refinement—it should feel more fluid and spontaneous rather than structured. One thing I really like is that you’re adding in friendly laughs, which helps make the performance feel more natural. Keep building on that!

Overall, great effort! Focus on projection, fluid pacing, breath control, and maintaining a natural smile, and this read will feel even more engaging and polished. Keep up the good work!