Really love the richness of your tone. Your voice is very friendly and welcoming and I could easily understand every word you said. If I were to critique anything, I would just say that there were a couple moments in the middle where things sounded a little rushed, but it didn't detract from the listening experience. Fantastic job.

There’s a good attempt at making the read feel conversational, which is a great step in the right direction! Now, the next level is to think of something genuinely exciting and bring that energy into the performance. If the material doesn’t naturally excite you, try associating it with something you’re passionate about—this will help the delivery feel more engaging and natural.

Projection still needs improvement. Right now, it’s not quite where it needs to be, and remember your setting—you’re in a gym without a microphone, so your voice has to carry. This doesn’t mean yelling, but it does mean supporting your voice with your diaphragm and using proper breath control to project without strain. Practicing diaphragmatic breathing exercises will help develop stronger, more controlled projection.

There’s a little bit of word slurring toward the middle of the read, which makes it harder to understand certain phrases. Make sure you’re articulating and enunciating each word clearly, especially when the energy picks up. Sometimes, excitement can cause words to blur together, so keeping control over articulation will help maintain clarity.

One of the stronger aspects of this read is the subtle smile that carries through different choices. It adds warmth and personality to the performance, making it feel more inviting. That’s a great instinct—just make sure it’s consistent throughout so the energy remains steady.

Toward the end, you lose your footing slightly, which makes the pacing feel a bit awkward. This could be due to breath placement, uncertainty in delivery, or losing momentum. Practicing stamina-building exercises—such as reading aloud with intentional pacing control—can help smooth out the flow so that the read doesn’t lose energy or clarity in the final moments.

Overall, great job! Keep working on projection, articulation, and maintaining steady pacing, and your read will feel even stronger and more polished. Keep at it!