Very well done! Nicely paced and consistent!

I love how I can still hear your voice through all the advertisments- if that makes sense haha like I can still hear YOU and not just a generic advertising voice! The pacing was very good and the energy was on point, I was with you for the whole ride. The voice you did at the beginning was full of life and somehow you were able to almost make this advertising read sound- I want to say- conversational. Fantastic work!

Projection needs to be worked on here, as it doesn’t match the setting of the script. Right now, the delivery feels muted, which makes it harder to believe that you’re speaking in a large space like a gym without a microphone. You’ll need to engage your diaphragm and push more air through your voice to create the right level of resonance and power for the scene. Think about how you’d naturally speak to someone across the room—not by shouting, but by using strong, supported breath control to give your words more weight.

The pacing is a bit on the slower side, which can work in some cases, but here, it makes the read drag slightly. Try finding a balance between a natural, conversational rhythm and keeping the energy up so that the read feels more dynamic.

That being said, enunciation and pronunciation are strong, which shows that you focused on clarity—this is a great foundation to build on! Just make sure you don’t let the desire for clarity make the delivery feel too rigid or overly structured.

There could also be more of a smile in the read. Right now, there are traces of it, but it doesn’t last long throughout the entire performance. Smiling while you speak naturally brightens the tone of your voice, making it sound more engaging and enthusiastic. Try maintaining that warmth from start to finish so the energy doesn’t fade in certain spots.

I can tell that you’re actively trying to change things up, which is great! You do attempt some variation towards the middle and end, but one thing to watch out for is the sing-songy quality that emerges when listing things. This pattern can make the read sound too predictable, so try adding more variation in tone, pacing, and emphasis to keep the delivery fresh and engaging.

Overall, this is a solid start, but by working on projection, maintaining energy, and breaking up patterns in delivery, the read will feel even more natural and dynamic. Keep up the good work!