We're lacking in the projection. Remember what the scenario is - you're in a gymnasium with no microphone and your voice needs to be heard throughout. When you speak lowly like this, it doesn't bring the realism to the scene, so try to imagine yourself in it.

It sounds a bit more like you're reading from the script and making it sound very "commercial" like it's for tv or something, but again think about the scene, who you're speaking to and what you're trying to convey emotionally. We want our performances to come off natural, regardless of what character we are.

Very nice with your words holding clarity throughout. Very easy to understand what you were saying!

Your audio starts to drone out towards the end. I'm not sure if its from you moving away from the mic, the gain is adjusted, or you just got quieter in your voice. Overall, nice job!