I want you to project a lot more so that it fits the scenario given! Imagine yourself in a gym with no microphone and you need everyone in there to be able to hear you. Engage your diaphragm and really push your words out.

I really like the overall tone and personality in this! I hear some chuckles and it sounds conversational. Your words are nice and clear!

You had some flubs and you handled them well, but you don't have to rush back in. Take a moment, take a deep breath to reset, and dive back in. You lost your energy a tad when you instantly went back to it, which is pretty normal for actors. Overall though this is a great start so good work!