Love listening to your voice with these advertisements, maybe because it's all your years of experience, but you give life to these words! Which I REALLY enjoy! Fantastic job between changing tone and pitch and pacing, very smart acting, my good sir. I can't wait to hear more. Amazing job!

It feels a little bit rushed, especially in the beginning where it feels like you aren’t taking moments or big breaths. Take your time and vary up your pacing depending on the emotion and situation of the words and scene.

I love the energy and tone you're giving off, but you do tend to overemphasize a lot of words in a single sentence or phrase. I would tone that down slightly and emphasize where it feels most natural to you.

Good projection! I definitely want you to project more, but this is a very great start. Use your diaphragm and push those words out there!

I love the variation you have where you're projecting and then you get a little quieter like a commercial would for the warnings and such and would be a great variation for an audition, but for this specifically, remember what the scene is (Gymnasium with no microphone and you need to be heard throughout) Keep up the great work!