Nice work! First, you wanna watch out for those T sounds, especially in "Peter", "trotted", "Jotting", etc and not make them D sounds. Really hit on those T's. We naturally make them sound like D's since we talk lazy in everyday life, but when we record voiceover, we have to be distinct with each work and make sure everything is technically correct. The more you practice tongue twisters and even this script, the more your mouth and mind will start getting used to saying them correctly and then eventually it'll become natural to you and sound like normal everyday chat. Other than that your articulation was pretty nice!Another thing is trying to break from the static tone and change up a little. It sounds a bit more like you're reading the words, but not really bringing the story and script to life. Think about what you're saying, who you're speaking to. Are you telling a bedtime story to kids? Are you sharing an old memory with a friend? Are you giving a speech in the middle of the forest to wildlife? Don't be afraid to get imaginative! Keep up the good work!