Great energy off the bat!

0:13 You sounded a little unsure when you hit "GGG". If this were a commercial, you would generally want to throw a lot of emphasis and confidence on the company brand - after all - that's important (and they're probably the one paying you!). :)

Nice character laugh around 0:20 that really adds to the performance. Nice job.

0:39 Don't be afraid to go all in on your character creature sounds! I liked that you made a moment with that part of the scene and had more than one thing happening. Good!

0:48 Love the energy

1:02 Best-est-est - In another take, I'd encourage you to play with change ups on the second and/or third "est" to put more life and energy into it instead of keeping them all the same sound.

1:15 With the flub - all good! I like that you laughed as you played through it. You can take that flub in character and continue with it as you did. Or, if you were doing something where you need a more polished finished product, I would encourage you to go back and re-record starting from the beginning of the sentence. It can be very difficult to match the tone/pace/style of a fix half-way through a sentence, so best to restart that line or section. The laugh you had at the beginning of the corrected section is good, but it might sound odd if you cut out the flub and just picked up there randomly laughing if that makes sense. :)

As you got to the end of the read you lost the feel of a character and became more of a reader and lost some of the energy. Try to maintain the character throughout the whole script.

The tagline at the end is also something we want to read with emphasis/importance in a commercial read. The last thing is often what people remember so we want to do it well!

Overall - I thought your articulation, energy and projection were good. Keep up the good work!