Slow down! When you start out super fast, it's harder for the audience to catch on and stick to listening cause they're battling with keeping up with you. When going faster, you're also losing the articulation and causing your words to blend together, so take your time and really hit on the articulation, especially for this weeks script. You mixed up your T's and D's, like in the words Peter, jotting. little, trotted, etc.

I'd love to hear you make this more dynamic and break from the static sorta tone you got going on. The tone tends to stay within the same realm the whole way through, so changing up small things such as the pacing, and hitting on certain moments with different emotions can bring a whole new take to this. Keep practicing and try to listen back and adjust your speed to fit your natural speaking speed. Good job!

Thank you for the feedback. I have a Utah accent we don't say our T's so that's part of my issue lol I'll work on it from here on out!