Nice job with the inflections

First, I want you to slow down a bit. Because your flying through the words, you're running out of breath faster and it causes you to take small breaths in weird spots. Take a big, deep breath in the beginning and take your time with the script and words and naturally find where a break can happen, then repeat with another big breath. I want this to sound very naturally and conversational. It's not a race or something that you're reading word for word! Try to play around with your tone so that it's not the same the whole time. Think about ways to change up inflections, emphasis on certain words, intensity and volume, pitch, etc. You wanna make your performance stand out and be uniqiue. This sounds like you're reading this for the first time, but I encourage you to practice a few times before recording just so you're more familiar with the words and isn't like a straight cold read, cause cold reads are a skill in themselves.I noticed when you flubbed up, you started going faster which could be from nerves from messing up. When you make a mistake, just restart from the beginning of the sentence and take a moment if you have to! We all make mistakes, and taking a moment to get back into a good mindset is key so that you dont let the mistake affect you mentally. Keep up the good work and make sure you continue your exercises, doggy pants, and straw exercises to really build up that breath control!