Really good.

I think it would be helpful to find the spots where there are natural breaks to breathe. That way you can still get enough air, and you dont break a phrase or combine phrases that are not meant to be.

Good job!

Nice job but let's slow down—a lot. Never feel like you need to rush through a script. When you go at a fast pace, it can contribute to stumbling over words and result in less clear articulation. Remember, your listener doesn’t have a script to follow along with like I do. In most cases, they’ll only hear you say something once, so it’s important to be as clear and precise as possible. Slowing down not only helps your articulation but also gives your performance more weight and allows the listener to fully absorb what you’re saying.

Think about the scenario of a gym with no microphone—can your voice reach everyone in that space? Projection is key to making the setting believable. You want your voice to fill the room and engage the audience as if they’re sitting in the back row. To do this, take bigger breaths and use your diaphragm to support your voice. This will give your words more power and ensure they carry with ease. Exercises like straw breathing or diaphragmatic breathing can really help strengthen this skill over time.

Also, don’t feel pressured to power through mistakes when reading. Rushing through errors can actually drain your energy as you move further into the script. Instead, take your time, pause, and reset yourself. Starting over from the beginning of the sentence allows you to recenter and deliver the line with consistent energy. It’s better to take a moment to regroup than to let small stumbles impact the flow of your read.

Finally, think about how to add variety to your delivery. Consider fun ways to change up your tone and how you want your audience to feel after hearing you. Are you aiming for excitement, reassurance, or something else entirely? Playing with your tone and inflection can make your read more engaging and memorable.

You’re off to a great start, and with these adjustments, your performance will feel even more polished and dynamic. Keep practicing—you’re doing an excellent job! Also, I must know, is this thumbnail of Link from LOZ its the only thing I can think about lol