Hey, I really enjoyed the personality you brought to this read! I could hear the smile in your voice, which gave your performance an upbeat and engaging vibe. That kind of energy can really draw the listener in, so great job on that. Keep leaning into those subtle emotional cues—they make a big difference in how your delivery connects with the audience.

One area to focus on is your projection. Since the setting for this read is a gym full of people, your performance needs to reflect that environment to feel believable. You had some good moments of projection, but I’d love to see you maintain that energy consistently throughout the entire read. To achieve this, work on strengthening your breath support. Exercises like doggy pants are excellent for building diaphragm strength. Just like any other muscle, the more you train it, the stronger it will become. With better breath control, you’ll find it easier to sustain projection without losing energy or clarity.

On a smaller note, I noticed some sibilance—the “tsss” sound—on your S’s early in the recording. While I’m primarily focused on your acting and delivery, addressing this could enhance the overall quality of your performance. A simple fix is to adjust your microphone placement slightly. Try positioning it a bit farther away from your mouth or angling it off to the side to reduce the direct airflow hitting the mic. This can help minimize sibilance and create a cleaner sound.

Overall, this was a strong read with great personality and tone. Keep up the fantastic work on your acting, and with some continued focus on projection and breath support, you’ll take your performance to the next level. Excellent job!