Nice work! The section from "offer good while supplies last" to the end of that paragraph was especially convincing, sounded just like a real ad.

Slow down a little bit just so it doesn't feel too rushed and so you don't lose the clarity in your words. There was a few that missed the articulation and slurred together with the other words. I also didn't hear you taking big enough breaths to carry on throughout which can cause you to run out of breath and struggle towards the ends of sentences. I want you to find where you can take a pause to take a really big breath using your diaphragm so that you can fill your lungs up with air. This is going to help you with not only articulation, but your projection! Also during the disclaimer part, the words were somewhat hard to understand from them slurring together and lacking the articulation, so remember that the audience doesn't have the script so you have to make sure your words are very clear.I like that you were finding places to have little changes in pacing and such to add more dynamics to the performance, so good job!

I didn't hear the projection much here so make sure you think about the scene and how much volume and power your voice needs. Having enough air already naturally gives you a boost, but really push your words out and let your voice boom in that gymnasium! Don't be afraid to get loud, since that's a main struggle for many va's. Overall, keep up the great work and continue practicing and doing your exercises! You got this!