Great job! You have a nice, friendly tone and I like the little stylization of some words dragging a touch, specifically “and”, giving it a sort of smooth, chill vibe to it. Your pace is good too! For your mistake with the “batteries not included”, try to restart from the beginning of the sentence vs at the word that you flubbed on so that you have a fresh take on the sentence and dont have to try to edit within that (if this was a real audition editing wise). You did very well to move past the mistake though and not let is fluster you so thats good!

Remember we want you to project!! The volume you’re speaking at right now is perfect for someone who is close to you, but not for someone who is at the other end of a gym and you’re speaking with no microphone. You have to think about the scene and where your character is located in the scene. You wanna make sure you take enough breaths and fill your lungs to have the power to make your voice heard so that the audience can believe that you are speaking to someone farther away from you. Keep working on the breathing exercises and keep up the good work!