I really like the emphasis you put on certain repeated words. Lots of personality in the read! It's satire, and that totally comes through. And good diction on a lot of the consonants :)My small critique would be that the first time you say "it's our way of saying thank you," the end is thrown away (volume is low) a little bit, especially after the huge build-up preceding it ("pocket pencil sharpener!") which was so good.

I really enjoyed the personality you brought to this read. It feels like you genuinely care about what you’re talking about, which is fantastic. As voice actors, one of our biggest challenges is delivering scripts with authenticity, even when the subject matter might not personally resonate with us. It’s our job to make whatever we’re saying seem and feel like it’s the most important thing in the world to us at that moment. You’re already showing a strong ability to connect with the material, which is a valuable skill that will serve you well in this industry.

That said, I did notice some struggles with breath control. This is a common area for improvement and something that can really elevate your delivery. Remember to rely on your diaphragm to support your breathing and take deep, intentional breaths before starting a line or sentence. Having that air reserve will help you power through phrases without running out of breath, maintaining a steady and strong delivery throughout. It’s all about controlling the airflow so you don’t feel rushed or strained. Exercises like diaphragmatic breathing or using a straw for controlled breathing are excellent tools to build this skill.

You also had a few small hiccups with words during the read, but I want to commend you for how you handled them. You didn’t let those moments throw you off, which shows professionalism and resilience. Continuing without hesitation or drawing attention to those stumbles is exactly what you should do. Mistakes happen, and how you recover is often more important than the mistake itself.

Finally, I’d encourage you to keep working on projection. Think about the scene or setting you’re performing in and adjust your voice accordingly. If the script calls for energy and excitement, make sure your voice fills the space and matches the tone. Projection isn’t about shouting—it’s about directing your voice with intention and energy to create a presence that grabs the listener’s attention.

Keep up the great work, and don’t forget to keep practicing those breathing exercises, especially the straw technique—it’s a simple but powerful tool for improving breath control and consistency. You’re doing an amazing job, and I can’t wait to hear your progress!