Hi Autumn,
I noticed a few details missing from the instructions that could enhance the delivery.
First Line ("Help me"):This should sound more subdued, almost like a whisper, to convey her exhaustion. Her voice should have a clogged, nasal quality, as though she’s physically drained or sick. Imagine how you might sound when you're sick and asking for help.
Second Line (Crying):The cries currently feel too energetic and quick. Someone who's exhausted from crying would likely cry more slowly, with a moping, drawn-out tone. They wouldn't be hyperventilating, as their energy would be nearly depleted.
Last Line ("Can you help me, please?"):The last line for "can you help me please' Should sound like they are too scared and shy to ask for help. This comes off as hesitant-ish.
Hello, thank you so much for your valuable feedback, it really means a lot to me as I try to improve on my voice acting journey.