I think you had a unique take on this read. It felt like a genie trying to convince someone to make their three wishes. If I had to offer any advice, I would say it might help to practice tongue twisters to improve articulation. Overall, good job!

You had a pattern going on where you were inflecting up for a bit, then went down, then back up, etc etc. We don’t want to stick to patterns so that it’s not predictable and it can make the audience lose interest when they know what's coming next. Think about changing up other things like emphasis, emotions, adding in some pre life like a chuckle or even smiling throughout. Your voice was lacking projection, so try breathing with your diaphragm and getting a lot of air into your lungs so that you can make your voice heard in a gym with no mic. Overall, good job and keep working on those exercises!