carried through very nicely and genuinely made me feel like i was watching an advertisement. well done.

I could hear you running out of breath quite a bit, so we wanna really work on those breathing exercises and increase your lung capacity to grab more air! Take really big breaths with your diaphragm and find the pockets in the script where you can take more breath versus taking any micro breaths in between words and having to stop for too long. You want to project a lot more to fit the scene of the gym with no mic. You can also think about what unique aspects you can put into this to bring out more in the performance such as emphasis on certain words, a certain emotion you wanna convey to the audience, etc. Overall, good job!