I respect that you decided to tackled this the granny voice, I think you really nailed it! It really does sound like you're looking back on fond old memories.

Yes!! The granny voice fits great with this passage! I also noticed you took a pause after the "eye vitamin" part and tried it again. Nice job!

I really enjoyed your choice of doing a granny voice! It added to the storytelling. There were instances where you didn’t enunciate certain parts of words. An example of this would be in the word “often”. You softened the “t” to where it wasn’t enunciated, so make sure you listen for those. Your changes in pacing throughout the script really helped to keep the attention of the audience. Adding that variation keeps the read interesting and dynamic. A way you can enhance your read even more is by adding moments of a laugh or a sigh. Something that will bring more realism and emotion to what is being read. Also nice job moving past your mistakes and taking those moments to get yourself together again without losing the performance. Overall great job!