I am an adoring fan of the sport and the show

Nice work!

You had great changes in tone and energy throughout the script! Try playing around with your speed in some parts, like in the beginning having your pacing how it is, but when you get to commentating the game you can quicken up to signify that there's more energy and rush going on during the game! Remember not to forget your enunciation of the ending of words. Some of them got a little lost, which could cause confusion from the audience if they blend into the next sentence and other words. This will allow your message to be conveyed to your audience clearly. I also want you to work on your breathing to make sure you are ending your sentences strongly. It will also help you to get through long sentences without needing to take a pause in the middle of it and give you a lot more air to play around with to bring even bigger energy. Keep up the good work!