Great job on your performance! For future recordings, try to focus on delivering just one take that captures the essence you’re aiming for. I particularly liked your second take—it had more personality and character. However, your voice still needs to reflect the gym setting more effectively. Take a deeper breath and use your diaphragm to project your voice with more intensity.

To truly make your performance stand out, experiment with different emotions, inflections, emphasis, volume, and pacing. Remember, these aren’t just any pocket pencil sharpeners; they are THEE pocket pencil sharpeners. Let your performance convey that level of importance and excitement. Continue practicing your articulation and breathing exercises to ensure your reads are smooth and engaging. Nice work, and keep pushing to refine your delivery!