Has that late night advertiser feel to it! Nice job!

Nice work with your tone! You’ve got a good handle on conveying emotion and character. To further improve, consider taking a big, deep breath before starting a sentence. This will help create a cleaner flow and reduce those micro breaths you might be taking between words.

I noticed a few pronunciation and articulation issues where some words began to blend together. Focus on enunciating each word clearly and giving each one the time it needs. This will enhance your overall clarity and ensure your audience can follow along easily. Keep practicing these techniques, and you’ll continue to make great strides!