I appreciate that you were channeling your inner local cars salesman. Lol. Just be careful that you don't lean so far into a bit that you're forgetting you need to be understood as well. Definitely towards the end you started speeding up and just barreled through some of the phrases and they became harder to understand.

I can tell you had fun with the read, especially with the varied cadence! The changes in pacing were great and added a dynamic touch that the audience will appreciate. However, make sure to keep your words clear throughout to avoid them blending together. It’s important to articulate each word distinctly so that your message comes across effectively.

I noticed you were running out of breath at times. To address this, focus on deep breathing exercises and use your diaphragm more efficiently. This will help you maintain a steady airflow and avoid taking small, hurried breaths. With continued practice, you'll see improvements in your projection and clarity. Keep up the good work, and stay committed to those breathing exercises!