This recording has some potential, if you are open to suggestions/advice here are some that I would encourage you take.- Your diction could use some work, some of your words blur together and I want to hear all of them as their own word.(Something that I find that helps is doing tongue twisters. They train your mouth/tongue to sort of divide your words so they can be understood more easily.)

- More emotion behind it the lines, since this isn't a physical project, your actions won't be able to help portray the emotion so sometimes it is best to put more emotion in your voice acting so there won't be any doubt into what emotion you're portraying.(What helps me with a situation like this, is I either think of a situation personal to me that is similar to the one the character is in OR I imagine myself in that situation.)

- Opening your throat a little more(It might just be a mic issue)based off the recording, I can hear a bit of a buzz in your voice. Opening your throat could help solving that problem. If it's the mice then I apologize.

I do hope these tips help and please, feel free to re-audition with this new information! Thank you for your time!