Thank you all for any feedback! Breath control felt good and did this in one take. The breathing exercises really helped.

I think this is awesome for a single take. You sound confident, articulate, and clear. I also think your pacing is very clean with a friendly and agreeable tone considering we're projecting to a gym full of people who we don't know anything about.

I would have preferred some more variety in pitch/inflection. It sounds very consistent (which I don't think is negative in many cases but better for shorter takes) but gets repetitive. You have a very pleasant timbre to your voice.

Really impressive to get through a great take without any mistakes. You were really articulate; no words got lost, and I thought you came across as very likeable.

I wonder if you could project any louder, to get that 'in a crowded gym feel' - even though the conversational nature of your performance made it really warm and approachable. Great job!

Thanks for your feedback on my take!

Your reading is nice and clear—great job on that front! However, your projection needs a slight boost; right now, it's at a 6 out of 10. Try to push your voice a bit further, letting it carry more to fill the space. Your breath control is impressive, which is a fantastic foundation for stronger projection. Let's also see a bit more of a smile in your tone; it can really warm up the delivery and make it more inviting.

As you continue, remember to keep your audience engaged by considering who they are and what they might be interested in. This understanding can help tailor your delivery to better connect with them. Right now, the delivery feels a bit monotonous, as if you're just reading off the script. Remember to infuse more acting into your performance. Vary your tone, pace, and emotion to bring the script to life and make your narration more dynamic and interesting. This added expressiveness will help keep your audience captivated from start to finish.