Hey Daniel - thank you so much for playing with this. Loved the idea of this - I totally get it and can very much appreciate the story line. I am so torn on the beginning with the cough. I love the laugh and where it builds in the middle - then end feels a bit to staccato for me - I think the cough is over done for a scene like this - so I love all the choices you are making - because you gave me lots here, but I would want to direct this a bit more so the scene is a bit more fluid and the coughs not so over done. Clever here - just needs some tweaking