Love the fun you have with your slate. When it's animation do things like this. When it's commercial show the real you...when it's game maybe cocky you....etc - suit the genre.....but at the same time DO YOU and know that we love it that you are having fun. Really nice to switch from something so goofy to something so real and thoughtful and organic. I loved it. I felt that is was narrativee however REALLY well done in that narrator - like REALLY well done - if you wanted to sound more like you were talking to an aquaintance, don't forget to bring them in more. Think of them reacting, asking questions. IGNORE that it's all monologue but again A++++ on this delivery - really really good...but to suit the storyline you left at the end, i would want more of feeling like it was a two way conversation.. You are really so close to demo ready in my opinion. I hope I get to work with you on a demo and I'm intrigued into what you will pursue FIRST - you will do so well in many areas of VO. GREAT work - but lets learn what that might sound like if you had involved more reactive sounds/questions/comments/from who you are talking to (all made up) so that you dont sound like the narrator (SUPER good narrator though man I loved it)