This was bit of a reach. I was kind of all over the map with going up and down. However, it might be ridiculous enough that people will remember the free lunch and the weird phone number. Maybe I needed to record this during another part of the day for more authentic energy.

Ooo, I really like how your voice sounds! Somehow though, the speed at which you start some of the sentences makes it sound like each sentence was recorded separately, and then they were all stitched together into one recording? If it got slowed down just a bit, I think it would be perfect.

Great job! Your voice reminds me of an announcer for a local casino in Southern California! Love the excitement and clarity you had. Find ways to keep that excitement at the end as well (when you are reading the phone number).

You're only coming through the Left Speaker for some reason. Nice smile and pacing. Squirtle mentioned the sentence openings like 11s, and 19s ones in particular. You're playful and positive throughout. Nice work.