Chair!! Wow, that energy is amazing!! One thing to try is keep that crazy energy you have at the beginning and smash it into the end, monster truck style, ha! Also, can't wait for the retro music video dance party!

So much energy!! It feels like you're riding an adrenaline wave! :D

So much explosive energy! It really packs a punch! I think you had good pacing, and it was fun to listen to. The intensity is a little overwhelming for me though. If someone came at me with this pitch, I'd be like a deer in headlights LOL

Thanks and we did want YOUR self critique ;) Great to know how big you'r ready to go. Obv to balance this as if talking TO someone will require tempering that often but I think you can get away with 3 little areas that play with the over-the-top/absurd wink to the audience. Try and capture those without peaking so we can know what their usability is :)