Its Pronounced Ruhd-Lahn, as opposed to Rood-Lahn. I feel that the inspirational vibe is kind of lost, I can tell that you are talking to someone who is younger to you, that specifically they are feeling a bit defeated. But as the read gets started that inspirational feeling seems a bit lost. Try to smile through this, and really think, how are you going to inspire someone? How are you going to make sure someone is going to feel inspired after hearing this? How do you want your daughter, the audience, to feel after the reading of this script. The pacing of this felt a little same-y also. Try your best to change up how you would say this, I can hear some change ups, but really try your best to exaggerate some of it, to really sell it home.