Hey there - thank you so much for submitting. I love that you play in your intimate and whisper tones as well - once you learn more mic techniques that will be very powerful. I think you stay in the tears for too long but Love that you'll go there. Many performers do this scene too desperate - it takes away confidence in the character and you can lose your audience a bit - there is a way to mix the desperation with a confidence that grabs the audience. you go into this beautifully intimate place in the middle - and that was the most powerful. Then you go back into the tear. Basically - less is more - use all your choices but don't SHOW them so much - just let them come out naturally. thank you for letting go. love that always