Wow! Just wow. I can hear your facial expressions, and that's incredible. Good follow-through at the end of those lines. Frequently, people trail off at the end of their sentences (lord knows I do it a bunch).

Hey Lisa - thank you so much Love your rawness - I can hear you putting in raw emotion - which is wonderful - you almost border on clarity as an issue but NOT - so it's raw so it slurs slightly - which is okay - maybe once or twice - just don't over due that. Believe it or not holding back from them seeing us cry is more powerful than totally going there - but loved knowing you are willing to. Then for a lot of it you sound desperate - i love how raw you will go - like when you say " You can pretend all you want". that's when I love you but don't over due that - then after that you go a bit too big - Overall this is too big but I do love what i can do with this - so nice base here. You are trying to over show some of yoru emotions so becareful - and we will go through lessons that will help this for sure - but love where you'll go!!!!