I LOVE how you said "gooey". Everything after that got drowned in my laughter. When the begging begins, I think you can show more there.

Hey Boxed Treats - thanks so much - I like where your FEELINGS are - however lots of this is STRETCHED OUT a bit "ME" and your opening - it is almost slow - you are making decent choices here but they are pushed and stretched out in some areas (which normally is good - but it feels over done). Then you say Don't go please - and then you had me much better - you weren't so slow and elongated over and over - much better on the second half. Felt more real. So you were obviously making a choice to show her anger and desperation but it was coming across too pushed and too methodical - last half was awesome - good work.