You nailed the emotion in this read! I can feel the passion in your delivery. However, there's an opportunity to take it even further and bring even more emotion into the performance. Try exploring different emotional nuances and variations to make the read more captivating and engaging. While your tone and style are good, adding more emotional depth will prevent the read from sounding too monotone or repetitive. Keep practicing to improve your clarity, as clear enunciation is essential for a successful delivery. I especially loved the inflections you added around the 1:35 min mark, and incorporating more of that will definitely take this to the next level! Overall, you're doing great, and with continued effort to bring more passion and clarity into your reads, you'll keep on improving.