I want to hear more of the "T" sound here, like in "PeTer" and "little," instead of "Peder" or "liddle." Practicing bringing out those strong sounds in these words will help improve your articulation. Your pacing was very solid, and I liked the overall narrative tone in your voice. My critique for the tone is that it doesn't sound "interesting" enough to me. Instead of simply reading a story, you want the audience to experience and live the story. Adding emphasis, using passionate emotion, and exploring different vocal expressions will go a long way in keeping your audience engaged. I encourage you to delve deeper into the emotional nuances of the script and experiment with ways to make the story more captivating. Overall, great job! Focus on enhancing your articulation of specific sounds like "T" and work on bringing more dynamic and engaging elements to your delivery. With continued practice and exploration, you'll be able to create even more compelling and immersive performances. Keep up the good work!