Good job on maintaining consistent PTDs (plosives, fricatives, and affricates) throughout most of the script. However, there were moments where the consistency wavered, so keep practicing to ensure a more solid execution. Your pacing was generally good, but the numerous pauses within the lines made the overall delivery feel slow. Work on finding a balance between taking appropriate breaths and maintaining a smooth flow. One helpful technique is to practice performing the script in one breath during your own time. This will improve your breath support and allow for a more seamless delivery. Your voice tone is pleasing and has potential, but I encourage you to explore using it more consistently throughout the script. Additionally, try to minimize the use of glottal fry at the end of phrases or for pauses. Focus on producing a clear and smooth vocal quality. Strengthening your breath support will greatly assist with all of these aspects. By developing your breath control and capacity, you'll have more control over your pacing, phrasing, and overall delivery. Consistent practice and vocal exercises targeting breath support will yield improvements over time. Remember to keep practicing and dedicating time to honing your voice-over skills. With continued effort and focus on breath support, you'll be able to refine your technique and enhance the overall quality of your performances. Well done on your progress so far!