Great work on the clarity of your speech, but there were a few instances where certain words weren't fully pronounced. Make sure to spend some time on your warm-up exercises and techniques to help with this. Visualizing your audience and the purpose of your speech can be really helpful too. For instance, picture the person or people you're speaking to - how would you want to convey your message to them? What tone or style of speaking would best resonate with them? These considerations can help guide your delivery and make your read even more compelling and authentic. It also sounded like you're lacking some excitement or passion for what you're speaking about. When doing voice-over, especially for commercials or pitches, it's essential to show enthusiasm for the product or idea you're discussing. The listeners are not just listening to your words, but they're also picking up on the energy and emotion you're conveying. If you don't sound interested or excited about it, it's going to be hard for them to feel any different. Try to imagine you're talking about something you're deeply passionate about, something that gets you excited, and let that energy fill your performance. Let's bring some more energy and passion to the read! You're doing a good job, let's keep improving!