Felt like I was listening to the radio! Nicely done, overall. Little bit of room treatment would help eliminate what reverb is there. Great work!

Slow it down a bit It's not a race at all, and I felt no passion at all in your voice. The tone is good and fits the commercial vibe that this script gives off, but it fails to capture me or make me wish to continue. REMEMBER THIS IS A GYM FULL OF PEOPLE. Instead, take the pacing down quite a few notches and BRING the HEAT with a PASSIONATE performance! Instead of reading a script, I want to feel like you are selling me something with EVERYTHING you have. Work on this for next week! Keep doing your daily vocal doggy pants as well I notice you ran out breath a lot in this read. Remember this exercise will help strengthen your breath control and support, essential for delivering long sentences without gasping for air. It will also help you to project your voice effectively across the metaphorical gym full of people you're addressing. Nice job