Also, its quiet because of the no editing rule, I can normalize it if you wish

Now there are a couple of things you can do to make this read stand out. You need to give this read a little more life; I want to feel the PASSION in your voice! Right now, it sounds like you are simply reading a script. Instead, slow it down and focus entirely on the projection aspect of this read. Slowing down can help your audience absorb what you're saying and make your read more impactful. Take your time, emphasize key points, and project your voice. Remember, you're not just reading to your audience; you're performing for them. Make me smile! Make me want to stop everything I'm doing and buy a million of this product!! I know going fast seems like a way to help make the read stand out, but instead, focus entirely on the character-performance aspect. Excited to see how you improve!