Great voice! Good recovery on the mistakes.

Well, I can really appreciate you leaving all the takes in here. The biggest thing right now is the setting for the script. This doesn't feel like you're in a gym full of people. Try adding more passion to what you're saying remember your setting you're talking to a gym full of people and don't have a microphone LET US HEAR WHY WE NEED TO BUY THIS PRODUCT! I also think slowing just a tad bit wouldn't hurt. Keep working on that articulation and you'll be fine I can't wait to watch you grow.